There are a lot of companies that have an online website where you can buy their articles. In my opinion, create this Internet pages can increase the sales of a shop, but i personally prefer not buy online. So, i disagree with the statement.
On the one hand, it is clear that go to the shop give you a lot of advantages. One of them is, for example, that you can try on clothing or shoes. Moreover, you can see the quality of the product that maybe, you are going to buy.
However, on the other hand, buy online technological systems like computers or TVs are often better than buy it in a shop because of the sale price, which it's cheaper on the Internet.
In conclusion, i normally prefer high street shopping where the seller can give you some advices although, on special occasions are more comfortable and less expensive buy the article at the store.
REVISION: use of definite and indefinite articles, syntax and the use of gerund as a subject.
ResponderEliminarcreate this Internet pages --- creating these Internet pages
prefer not buy online --- prefer not to buy online
So, i disagree with the statement. --- Irrelevant
One of them is, for example, that you can try on clothing or shoes.--- For example, you can try on all the items of cloting or footware you want
go to the shop give you a lot of advantages --- going to the shop gives you a lot of advantages
that maybe, you are going to buy.--- Punctuation (use of commas) --- that you might buy.
However, on the other hand, --- Don't you think one linker is enough?
buy online technological systems like computers or TVs are often better --- buying ... is often ...
which it's cheaper --- which is cheaper
where the seller can give you some advices --- sellers ... some advice
on special occasions are more comfortable and less expensive buy the article at the store. --- on special occasions it is more comfortable and less expensive to buy the article at the store.
although --- Why this linker?
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